what i see, what i feel
deep within
changes everything
every meaning
i'm not who i thought
i'm not who i was
i'm not the thing
it shines so bright
i cannot look
it kills from the back
from the front
it shows no mercy
how can i know it
how can i tell
the damage is done
the glass has been shattered
i'm nothing but pieces
reflected in your eye
i'm nothing but reflections
pieced in your heart
go
save yourself
before it's too late
before you end up like me
Author notes
the no capitalization or punctuation is done on purpose, i wanted it that way.
A contest entry
- DFI Round 3 ~ Through the Looking Glass by And Hyetal.
850 points, ended March 15, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So...
Comments
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Imagery: 1 point
Theme: 1 point
Use of Form/Flow: 1 point
Other criteria: 1 point
Overall Appeal: 1 point
Having no capitalization or punctuation is always a risky thing to do with a poem, but I think you worked it out well. It really added emphasis to the poem and made it flow better.
Interesing theme, and I like the imagery.
Thank you for entering!
~Cassie
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