The door, ever open,
Remains shut perpetually.
My mind set against my heart,
A ceaseless dividing conflict.
To yell, to beat down the door.
That fictitious piece of wood;
The unfeeling barrier trapping me
Pitilessly from the outside world.
Or to keep it unopened,
Therefore defending myself
Against the bitter world beyond
The barriers protection.
Like that Shakespearean saying:
"To be or not to be"
That was the question.
And still it remains
Unanswered
In my conflicting mind.
My hand on the
Brass handle,
Resting feverishly.
The decision regarding action
Warring in my
Clashing mind.
Author notes
Wynsom Trouble.
A contest entry
- Poets Survivor 3 - Audition Inverval Two by Ryno.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 3 entries
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Comments
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i lyke dis
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ahh amazing! thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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well done! u have written this really well...
no critism just excellent work
thanks for entering -
Amazing poem. I loved the contradiction in the first two lines. This was a very well written and thought out poem. The feelings expressed were simple, as everyone is afraid of letting the world inside. Thanks again for entering this into my contest.
Good luck and best of wishes
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LOVE THIS!!!!Great job!!You definitely deserved the gold on this!!
"To yell, to beat down the door.
That fictitious piece of wood;
The unfeeling barrier trapping me
Pitilessly from the outside world"
Wonderful words used here.....amazing job!!!
God Bless,
PointShoesAndPoetry
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to let in that which could hurt you or to leave out that which can love you. truly i am sure everyone has felt this but i think that in the end, we all have to know one thing, what that is i don't know yet but when i do i will tell you, keep it flowing
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"The door, EVER open" first line, extra y.
I know exactly how this is, because I do this with the world sometimes, but there's only so much you can protect yourself against the world. Sometimes, you just have to let go. Better than the prewrite I reckon. Wish you good luck in the contest.
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