These are only words I speak
they float into the air
These are only thoughts I think
They come from and go
nowhere
This is only the winds that blows
across a lonely earth
carrying echos of the hopes and dreams
we lost at birth
Can you hear me
Can you see that I am real
Can you hear me
Do you know that I can feel
Is this heart that beats within
nothing more than the blowing wind
or can you hear me
Please tell me what you think
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Does life really matter? Do I really matter? Questions we all wrestle with from time to time. Nicely written. I loved the fourth and fifth lines the best. I also see a lot of potential in the next phrase, but I think making it personal would give it more impact. "I am the only wind that blows across this lonely earth, carrying echos of the hopes and dreams I lost at birth." Think about it. Or not. It's still a nice piece.
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I would like to thank all of you for taking the time to read, and for your kind comments
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BEAUTIFUL AND I AM SURE YOU ARE HEARD. EXCELLENT WRITE GOD BLESS
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great write. makes me think about every single line. you can express things very well.=]
"This is only the wind that blows
across a lonely earth
carrying echos of the hopes and dreams"
...these lines made me think the hardest and are my favorite ones in the whole poem =]]
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Interesting...I really liked the rhythm of the piece. This poem made me feel the empty lonliness. My favorite part was "Is this heart that beats within nothing more than the blowing wind or can you hear me?" Thanks for sharing.
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