night
permanently
you can
try to escape
but stars, they’re stalkers
& moon reflects faces
to enemies
besides,
Earth is too small
I keep finding my way back…
in the dark… [!]
A contest entry
- 31 Words or Less With A Prompt. by Exodus.
525 points, ended February 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Shoot.
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I like this and the ending is brilliant, I read this as though the pain ws bigger than earth. Love it!
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Hahah Well Penned
A very interesting different well penned poem that really hits the spot as to me this is like a Camper's dreams/nightmare haha m,enaing it is a dream because they sleep peacefully under the stars of the night with the moon reflecting off the man made natture lake but then again a nightmare because where is the bathroom and even more so whre the hell did the cap go haha. any ways a very interesting beautifully penned poem that I enjoyed pondering alot about. keep up the very good work as always -
This is very different from a lot of the pieces I've read for this contest so far but it was really wonderful. I'm not sure the first two words work as well as the rest but it has a lot of impact. Thank you
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this is kind of weird but in that good way that makes you think, keep it flowing and i knew i couldn't trust the stars or that moon.
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this is awesome... sorta creepy though thinking of something like stars stalking me... gosh, ryan... i don't think i'll look at the nighttime the same way for awhile...
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