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evening shower falls


evening shower falls
beneath the lunar circle
continuously


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  • BellaD
    August 7, 2008

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    I cannot comment on haiku form as I don't know enough about it, but I love the soft imagery this evokes.

  • piccola silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    Nice job. The count is good, the vision is nice, I just have a problem with the set up and the aha! I am a student of haiku-monk lol. thank you for entering. I did notice that there are no caps and that's a good thing


  • james119
    July 13, 2008
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    Nice imagery. A big old moon through branches raining leaves.


  • toomysterious
    April 9, 2008
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    Beautiful as all rain is. You have done honor to the haiku.


  • Pollycheck
    March 27, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my haiku contest.

    evening shower falls
    beneath the lunar circle
    continuously

    This has an interesting concept to it, but normally a haiku should be a photograph in time and written in sense images.


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    All about rain - liked these three lines and the image they create. Haiku are short and to the point poems, then with that aha moment or turn.


  • Perception
    February 22, 2008

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    Yes... With so very few words ~~ you had a very beautiful description...

    Wonderful job


  • Eternalsyn16
    February 14, 2008
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    very nice haiku. they always say alot with a little.

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