Fake smiles on
their faces,
the black holes of
your heart,
bleeding emotions
ravenously
rip you to shreds.
from the inside.
Everything you depend upon
means nothing
to the end.
Your body is quite simply
your souls' barren,
rotten tomb.
Author notes
Dedicate everything to your life, put it all towards that nothing at all....
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I love the imagery of the last two words. Personally I think you could have been even harsher with the lines; "emotions inside will endlessly / rip you to shreds." Keep the metaphor in there but really smack the reader in the face with it. Thank you
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