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No Guilt

Ashamed and confused,
But oddly overwhelmed with Felicity,
I am very amused,
By this love of Obscurity.

Tensions High,
and deluged with pleasure,
He's not a mistake,
I've come to Treasure.

No guilt about it,
I am not in your Debt,
He's the affair,
But your the Regret.

You are the lament,
I wish did not abide,
So I could be with him,
And be by your side.

You neglect and abuse,
The kindness of my texture,
He nurtures and cares,
And equals my Nature.

You pressure yourself,
And sometimes frighten,
Me in ways I cannot ignore,
And to you I am an item.

We're over, don't speak,
I can no longer take,
Your arrogance,
But you were the Mistake.



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  • Deprived-of-Reason
    August 10

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    Grea write.
    And i love that you realize that you are worth more than abuse, and even though you did have an affair, you realize that being treated properly is much more healthy for you.
    I do however, have one suggestion and that would be the black with the blue background is hard on the eyes, however the poem itself was fantastic. You express yourself beautifully.
    Thanks for the entry,
    and best of luck in the contest.
    -Kay


  • masked-monster
    August 8

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    Good write, it's not to often you hear of an affair ending this way, usually people stay with their partners and the affair ends, but you put a twist to it and I liked that, having the two lovers together and ending it with the partner.. Good job. Good luck in my contest!


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    November 10, 2008

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    This is an awesome poem. Oh, I loved the way you ended this piece. That is how I feel about my ex Greg. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 5, 2008
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    JUDGE:

    Moving out and moving on. Too few people know when to cut their losses. There were a couple of places I didn’t understand. Like: “So I could be with him,
    And be by your side.” “your” when you meant “you’re”. Capital letters scattered randomly. The odd comma out of place. I like the basic thought. I feel that the form is a little rough.


  • flyingphoenix
    June 9, 2008

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    for once, i don't feel sorry for the person who was cheated on here. Nice story within the poem.

    I felt the flow and ryhmes were a little forced sometimes, but other all it read well.

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    Sunny

  • ecrivain01
    June 6, 2008

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    Thanks for entering ...

    but the rules stated no love poems and especially no lost love poems.

    Good luck with your writing in the future and with the other contests.


  • XHollowXEyesX
    May 22, 2008

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    this is a different perspective on the reasons why some people cheat. I think this would have to be the best well written one yet.
    You have a great use of language and emotions.
    beautifull write
    Thankyou for entering
    All the best
    ~Hollow~


  • N e a r
    March 5, 2008

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    This really strikes a point. It's very deep and rich in such.. anger and oppression to this abuse that someone has given you. The way you worded it really speaks to the reader. Excellent write. Thanks for sharing.


  • Hetha gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    This shows how people can regret, but has that deliberate sense of not feeling like a mistake, nor having any guilt nor shame for loving someone. Thank you for your entry and good luck.


  • DestiniesTwined
    February 20, 2008
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    This is a good poem. Thanks for entering. Good luck.


  • Charley-
    February 19, 2008

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    Hello and thanks for entering my contest i thought your piece was very Good i like the story you had there best of luck to you and thanks again.


  • gothicchildren05
    February 12, 2008

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    it shows a slight turn around but yet doesn't. it shows that you were cheating but it wasn't a mistake...the mistake was being with the person you were with. this is a good piece and I wish you luck. thank you for entering.


  • Michael555
    February 11, 2008
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    FUCK YEAHHH!!!!

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