Living
with an eye towards eternity,
one obeys the strictures of the church.
Denial of self, wealth and substance
insure heaven...
only to wake up to nothingness;
I sacrificed for nothing.
©2008 rous
2-11-08
Author notes
Written for the contest: Contest 31 Words or Less With A Prompt. by Friday
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2390553
A contest entry
- 31 Words or Less With A Prompt. by Exodus.
525 points, ended February 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A critical comment is invited
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that rings with a chill. its creepy and scary, and i can definately say i've thought about it. i love your closing line. Its so full of emotion and informal. absolutely loved it!
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Thank you, Mat. Although I do not really think this way, it was a step outside the box. And, I can see where others would feel like this. An interesting prompt.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
rous
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nice poem
nice poem, it has a truth about it i think or i'm not sure i like the poem just unsure of my view.good luck in the contest.i'm out of points. -
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Thank you.
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wow ... such a powerful piece in so few words, rather one believes these words or not, they can't deny the power behind them. This is one well written piece of poetry dear and I hope that the contest host sees that. Best of wishes during judging.
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Thank you. I can never decide whether to go with short things or lays. I am glad you liked this. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
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I never was one for religion. But I can feel the despair behind this. The feeling that you've spent so much of your life believing, knowing something to be true only to find out it's a lie. Thankyou
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Good. It always gratifying to know the point got across. Thank you for taking the time to comment.
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Hi. yep, painful when we wake up is it not?
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Pretty much. Good thing I do not believe this.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It is greatly appreciated.
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