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Enough

You left me,
alone in this misery.
Alone I lay.. alone to die,
used to the acid tears while I cry.
The venom burning my heart,
from the fact of us being apart.
The sweet taste of rejection,
fills my soul with horrible perfection.
So this is it? the ending to call?
Forget bout what we had, forget bout it all!
You told me to go,
you told me you hate me,
fine.. so it shall be.
I tried to make things right,
But all you wanted was to fight.
When someday you realize what you have done,
By that time I'm long gone!

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ANOTHER OPTION:
Write a poem ABOUT breaking up. Don't make it over-the-top obvious and don't make it one big-ass metaphor.

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  • second-born
    February 14, 2008
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    wow...such a powerful piece...I liked all the strong images you've had in your piece...like this one "The sweet taste of rejection,fills my soul with horrible perfection." but what I liked most was the strong conviction of moving on at the end...this is such an awesome write...

  • Leucothea
    February 13, 2008
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    One can only hope that the person who ended things will realize what they have lost!


  • Downloaded Love
    February 12, 2008
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    Alone I lay.. alone to die,
    This line really stuck in my mind....... Great Write!!!


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    February 11, 2008

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    "fills my soul with horrible perfection." I adore that line.

    And also, the use of punctuation and !s is perfect for this. I can actually imagine you laying there and screaming it to them. About them even. Very well done! I love it.

    ♥Tomorrow