Her day begins like a flame on a new trimmed wick
Through many hours she gives her all
Now evening has come and energy diminishes
With darkness tired eyelids fall.
Author notes
Prompted by a picture in an on-line poetry contest
Title: "Languish"
Artist: Mark Stock
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by poetryality.
600 points, ended February 12, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh my...
what a charming write...love your take on the pic prompt!!!
and the rhyme was wonderful too...
great job!
congrats on the well deserved bronze!
Blessings! Tammy
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Thank you Tammy I'm glad you liked it.
Jim
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Sounds like me after a day with Hannah.
Great write!
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Ah yes but a worthwhile langour in that case Hmmm?
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Oh,yes...
When I think of the six incomplete years wondering if I would ever become a mom it gives me a great deal of fulfilment.
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I like your take on the prompt. It is et aside from many other and that is refreshing. I also like the cleverness of using rhyme when you are give a word limit. Excellent! I feel like you've described on lots of occasions. LOL Thank you for this entry into my Comp, and I wish you the best in this contest.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Thanks for those kind words and the shiny little pot.
I must confess to having thought of the lost love theme first but I like to hoe a different row to the rest and thankfully the picture gave me a second option. I am glad you liked it.
Jim
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Interesting
I see differently this picture. A good choice for a contest. You, as always rhyme well my friend.
Jim
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Thanks Jim but I must confess the rhyme here was very much an afterthought. My original line was something like "tired eyes will soon close"
I don't often go for really forced rhymes but I felt my original was a little lacking. I also felt that the longing for a lost lover idea which I thought of first would be done to death by other entrants. Probably better than I could too.
Jim
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