Latching parasitically
to the cold lifeless wall
Lives a breathless dependant.
It’s thin rectangular frame-
that grey metallic perimeter,
Hugs the poor beast’s face
with comforting arms
holding it together.
The chameleon face!
One tries to call it silver,
but it cannot claim any color
of its very own,
only the mimicked tints
of its envied company.
Despite its smooth, shallow surface,
it desperately attempts at depth,
through the whims of a mime.
But its attempts are only backwards
doppelgangers:
ghostly doubles that lack
the dazzling of the senses.
Reversed masks don’t satisfy.
It longs for its own face-
eyes, ears, nose,
mouth…
If the mirror had a mouth,
it would surely scream…
screech until it shattered the glass,
revealing its own face behind it.
A contest entry
- Lure Me In by redmarkonthewall.
525 points, ended March 16, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - _.:*~*:._.:*~*OPTIONS: BIG POINTS*~*:._.:*~*:._ by Erika Elektrikka.
2200 points, ended March 12, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 10 of 10
-
...Is this about a tv? Im confused...I do know though, i like the way it is written...but doesnt seem like it has anything to do with my contest options...
Good Luck,
Erika
-
First off thanks for heeding my advice. Secondly this is a very different take on something so common. Something many people don't think much about though many spend often too much time in front of one. I do like how you wrote you title. It fits very well with the poem. Thank you for your entry.
-
Now this is something. Very good. Man it is a triple reader, meaning must be read several tiems because it is so good.
-
Well I must say the title did lure me in so on that note good job but unfortunately you did not do what I asked and therefore I will have to DQ. Such a shame really. Feel free to enter and new poem however. Who knows if you can give me another one with a luring title like this one and make sure you do the simple thing I asked then perhaps you could win. We shall see though. Thanks for your entry anyhow.
-
-
I reread your contest rules and I was confused... what didn't I do that you wanted me to?
-
-
All I wanted was for you to leave the preview area blank. Put the '' to leave it blank, you know? Either way thatnks for asking about it. If you want you can change that and then re-submit it if you haven't already submitted another one. Thanks for responding.
-
-
-
I'm in awe of your recent poetry, Hon. I must admit, it's been awhile since I read your work, shame on me.
This piece holds such alluring pesuasion, inviting, drawing the reader in to a world of intrigue within the mind.
Great work and I wish you good luck in the contest
love and
Mamma
-
very interesting
very usual piece of writing, but i like this alot.
lots of luck to u in the contest.
-
Quite the personification! I loved how you called it a "chameleon face." Very unique, creative, and true. Does this 'mirror' the masks that all of us wear and wish to escape?
-
Hmmm, I like it. The wording was strange in some parts and you should check for spelling/grammar, I believe I found two mistakes. Very good work overall.
Adding your comment:
1 - 10 of 10
