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Midnight

water drains from falls
into glistening moonlight--
pure serenity

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  • paullallady silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    oh wow, what a beautiful image this
    creates in the minds eyes. amazing.
    really a great job on this one.


  • ukelova
    February 11, 2008

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    Water Drains

    Hello Jessica, i think you are writing about a waterfall, although it comes across from the first few words of your poem

    that you are writing about a water drain - a sewer.
    You have made the sewer a romantic place and I think that is very clever of you.

    I have been told that it's old-fashioned to write haiku in 17 syllables. are you an old-fashioned girl?

    BJ.


  • Lady-of-Twilight
    February 10, 2008

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    This is absolutely beautiful. So simple yet so magical in a sense. I love the last line, "pure serenity"... pulls it all together in a simple sweetness.