"So its begins," he whispers
To the wretched darkness holds
Against his eyes which are bound
Shadowed from the starlit hope
"Its you again," he mutters
To the mirrored wraith before him
To the hollowed eyes returned
Uttered to his lasting "sin"
"Oh my love," she lightly rasps
Slivers at his ears and sings
"What pleasures shall you show me?
To my folds, and sate my needs?"
"So I am the batten afloat
Who must yield to thy whims?
Why must you hound me?
And return to me again?!
Begone you wretched maelstrom!"
As the spray engulfs his words
Retorts and unfurls upon him
And alas he succumbs to her
Fettered by that shadow's need
A thirst to quench this aching calm
Of a hunger relinquished by her
That wretched beast, The Maelstrom
Author notes
Option 1. no explanation needed unless requested.
Enjoy
A contest entry
- He Hurt Me, I Love Him by Blooming Poet.
315 points, ended February 20, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All Used UP by CherryOnTop.
900 points, ended February 22, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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What do you think?
Comments
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brilliant.
go forth and write more! your dark poems are...incredible.
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I agree with the 'powerful' statement. Amazing job, great imagery, as per usual.
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this poem is very powerful. its filled with great imagery. you did an amazing job with this. you are right this poem speaks for itself.
thank you for entering into this contest
kat
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Thanks for the entry. great imagery
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Excellent write! Great job continuing to make the rest of us look like horrible writers because your work just blows all else out of the water
Love it, very emotional.
=)
Kayla -
This poem is truly awesome. I'm sorry that you feel like this. The emotions in this poem run deep and if for any reason you would ever need a friend. I'll be here to lend a shoulder or an ear. God bless you always and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep up the amazing poetry my fellow poetic friend.
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