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Bronze...The Spider and the Rose

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The pink rose buds

                    into full bloom

petals are opening wide

 

Anxious to impress

                 interested parties

with artistic beauty felt inside

 

A black spider crawls

                   upon the open rose

To enjoy the fragrant smell

 

damaging the beauty

                            of the bloom

by spreading his body so well

 

If the old spider doesn't leave

the young blooming rose

 

He'll weave a web of passion

and the petals of the rose

                                  will close

 

The web will destroy the beauty

for the petals cannot breathe

 

Suffocating the life

         from the body of the rose

the web of death will conceive

 

 

 

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  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    March 3
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    A very well written piece. I see great Metaphors all through this.
    A very deep poem yet Kinda sad in the end. The Two lines I felt realy stands out.

    The web will destroy the beauty
    for the petals cannot breathe
    ------------------------------------

    ED.


  • Manoj Sanyal
    February 15, 2008
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    nice poem with depth
    Thanks for your participation.
    Best wishes and good luck,


  • Romily
    February 12, 2008
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    Great

    "A black spider crawls
    upon the open rose
    To enjoy the fragrant smell

    damaging the beauty
    of the bloom
    by spreading his body so well"
    A very great poem.





  • arafura gold member
    February 10, 2008

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    "He'll weave a web of passion
    and the petals of the rose
    will close..."

    I get the impression that there are many metaphors in this? Great work and good luck in the contest!