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Cowgirl Blues

The smoke drifts to the sky
in an endless spiral of fumes.
A deep breath draws
in the smoke
of confusion
of how to feel about you.
I draw in endless thoughts
of nothingness
as my lungs breathe in
the emptiness of you.

Author notes

I suffer from "smoker's brain."

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  • HeavenScent4U
    February 10, 2008

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    Very nice take on the prompt I love the thoughts in this. Nice metaphor, great emotion. Thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed