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media relay

mass media relay on what they have to say

allways what they have to say

depicted scenarios of wars and aggeresions

then some twenty years later,

media displays some lame confessions

and chastise them for there transgression

what is the lesson

that keeps the world guessing

and god's influcance lessening



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  • Perception
    February 11, 2008
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    I would suggest that to you, to use a spell checker. That would do you some good. But, I think the overall affect of the poem is good. And honest with your opinions.

    I just wish it was a little stronger in the word parts

    Good write, though


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    February 11, 2008

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    >.> it's good. It could be a little more.. sweep-upping, but it's a very honest and well-put read


  • riobravo1
    February 11, 2008

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    yes good point well done
    it is always waht the "media" has to say
    never an objective account
    it is meant to be the news
    not my news or her news


  • Charity Ann
    February 11, 2008
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    I like it! I have a few grammatical critiques though...Allways in line 2should be spelled always, there in line 6 should be spelled their, and god should be God...it's a proper noun. Now, I really liked the quick, simple message of the poem. I agree...God's influence in the world is lessening. Thanks for sharing this provocative piece.