The moon rose in the ebony night
A white contrast against a canvas soaked in ink
Casting down a sallow glow
Illuminating the fearless faces of the night
The vacant hands clinging to the velvet cloths
Of the life they had left behind
The abstraction of her existence
Holding fast to what had escaped her lips
In a single breath—
Gone
A cold, heavy space inside her chest
Stagnant in frozen time
Yearning to touch
To feel warmth beneath her frigid skin
A single breath—
A blush of heat
A rush of flame through her veins of ash
Pallid fingers run through the threads of the moments past
Craving their timeless unity,
But finding only ends
A wretched sight
A puff of air frozen in the wind
Lost to the lips of time
She searches for the breath that gave her life
But had forsaken her in death
A contest entry
- The One That Got Left Behind- (Pre-writes only) by mystic-angel.
600 points, ended February 23, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended March 26, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ALMOST ANYTHING GOES by VerminVomit.
303 points, ended May 5, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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its so...
i dont see how you didnt get golds on the other contests this poem is so...so...breathtaking
illuminating the fearless faces of the night <--my fave part
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A beautifully penned piece. Some stunning imagery woven throughout. All the best in the contest with it
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Wow!
I agree with Darkest Sin - the cadence of this poem is quite amazing, and the careful wording is so enthralling... you just drew me into this cold, dark world and made me really feel the plight of this girl who has been left behind.
I love your contrasts between life and death.
Wonderful!
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ooooh! i like this poem a lot! The cadence and language are beautiful, the imagery is exquisite! "A rush of flame through her veins of ash" its simply marvelous. the mastery and feeling in every line...its a powerful poem that has wrapped itself around my heart. it tells a tale in poetic images,painting a story in the sky. i love this poem!
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Deep and meaningful. Well written. Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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