Her secrets and lies were beyond repair
She could have cried ten thousand years
Still she would not feel any better
Her guilt was tormenting her blackened soul
She felt cold from her hidden deceits
Empty like the back alley wino's bottle
It had to come out and it finally did
To relieve this pressured facade felt good
At last to just be "honest" even if it hurt
It hurt him, like she had so many times before
Even if he had not known about it, she did
Now, to deal with it as her mascara tears fell
A contest entry
- EMOTION SECRETS by R S Adams Jr.
1100 points, ended February 19, 2008, 19 entries
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Comments
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Movedme alot!
Even if he had not known about it, she did
Now, to deal with it as her mascara tears fell" He looks like a gardener cutting all plants blooming with flowers.The poem moved me to tears.
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so expressive and vivid..
This poem, I like a lot. The feeling swells as the poem moves on, in its emotion.
I like the simile with the wine bottle. 'Mascara tears' is an expressive phrase.
The poem gripped me with its feeling from beginning to end.
Well done.
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