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Laced


 

 

     intoxicated eyes gleam
     through facades of tiaras,
     that gently shroud
     drunken brilliance.

     as she clumsily waltzes
     through bottle strewn halls.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • XXCrimsonRaineXX
    February 10

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    i really liked your word choice. they really gave more meaning to the poem. i liked the first two lines the best, but the whole poem really blew me away. awesome write.


  • HeavenScent4U
    February 10

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    Wow, this is thinking outside the box, or should I say lamp shade I love the last two lines best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
  • this is stunning and pure perfection your wording is amazing and wowness.....well done and best of luck


  • Midnight-x-Rose gold member
    February 10

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    Pure beauty and perfection.
    The dazzle of the brightest star wouldn't shine so bright. Beautifully mastered.

  • Naridill gold member
    February 10

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    & while

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