I feel the moist air surround me
And the rain falling slowly
I can see the waves on the shore rise and fall
And the sun slowly setting
I touch the sand in my toes
And the dampness of my clothes
I can smell the food left over
And the dead fish that lay in the ocean
I can tell that everything is silent
And that everything is well
A contest entry
- a summer breeze ~ a season series by And Hyetal.
700 points, ended March 9, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Beautiful. Every word kind of touched me. This poem was simple, but great.
Thank you for entering.
~Cassie
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Wow, this is great!
I love the way that you take the
reader with you to this place.
The imagery is wonderful and so
are the descriptions you gave.
Well done and good luck to you here!
Jeremy0826 -
wow...i actually felt i was really there on the beach.
"I can see the waves on the shore rise and fall
And the sun slowly setting" <- my favourite part
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wow loved it
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