I need to find the place
to mend this broken heart
The sorrow it too must erase
so, I can make a new start.
A broken heart can heal
this the only thing I know
I'm needing something real
so I can finally let you go.
Teardrops falling down
not making a single sound
I shake then stare at the ground
seeing that love is no where to be found.
I need to be accepted
by another kindred soul
No longer to feel intrepid
in need to send this pain below.
I need someone to help me
mend this broken heart
Come and set my heart free
from this misery.
A contest entry
- Options for the Heartbroken by ThatONEweirdChick.
625 points, ended March 9, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The best of the best of the best by Thedamned77.
405 points, ended February 14, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice poem but the background is not proper.It would be better if you change it and put a background proper to the subject of the poem.
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I really loved this one and thank you for being a finalist. I hope you're not offended you didnt win. i really thought this was beautiful.
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so sad, a good write but sad....a broken heart can feel sometimes worse than physical pain, best of luck in the contest
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this is such a powerful write and i think that many can relate to the pain and sorrow displated in your words. well done
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a very good poem. full of hope. thanks for sharing.
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yes, I think many of us can relate to the pain and sorrow of a brokem. I always used to think how much kinder this world, if none of us had broken hearts, always happy, no sad times or sadness. hang on things will improve and get better. I am rooting for you.
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if there's one thing we learn it's that broken hearts eventually heal, and that they heal faster when we have someone to help us along
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So poignant and sad. You've expressed a deep and sorrowful emotion here and it was done very well! I wish you a speedy mend for your broken heart!
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Beautifully sad. I enjoyed this poem very much. The rhyme did seem a little forced at parts and i have to wonder if you meant the last line to rhyme or not, but overall i thought this was a marvelous poem. Thanks for entering.
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Sorry forgot the clappies
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You are not afraid to show your emotions. This is a sad post. You shall find someone to end your pain, just be patient,
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I need someone to help me
mend this broken heart
Come and set my heart free
from this misery.
This is so lyrical, it would make a wonderful song. A heartfelt poem, and so well written. Good luck in the contest my dear one.
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Well written good job!
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Very beautiful this was very well penned
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So from the judge's point of view now. -ahem-
Sometimes it really does take an outside force to help you get thru something because you can do all you can and still just feel bad so this write really captures that and good job with it! -
Awesome write. It's so sad but so true. I never did understand how people got into other relationships so fast because it's sort of a 'rebound' but now I realize (and you give insight) into why/how someone does that. Because the soul is a strange thing and sometimes it takes another person to realize that a heart won't stay broken forever. Such a sad write but with such good points to it. I hope you find someone to help heal your heart because it seems like you'll never move on but something will happen. Time is painful and time is slow but it keeps moving forward.
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Excellent
Awww this is so sad but very well written by you indeed. I am sure many of us can relate to how you fell and i only hope that you move on to happier times.
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this was so sad
i wish only good things for you brother
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oh.... this is so sad and heartfelt
I hope you find someone to sooth the wounds my friend
Delila
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this is such and sad poem that you have written. I can relate to the whole poem in many ways. you have taken the first step in healing your broken heart. I am truly sorry that this happened to you.
kat
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You are progressing......Well done!!
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