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The Sunlight Of Heaven

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The unforgiving,

beast of nature
howls it’s early arrival.
It was just outside,

the tennament house,
where an old man waited...
for the overdue reapping
of Gods grimmest soldier!

Gone was the sunlight
and the warmth
he had basked in.
It had passed into shadows
and no longer graced
the ricketty old window
he so loved to sit by.

He was chilled to the bone
as the breath of the beast
leached through his window.
Invading what little comfort
this small room offered.

On the wall by his bed
was the only decoration
that adorned his lonely room.

A picture of his wife
who had gone on before him
and there...

waited for him still.

He shivered and shook
under blankets too thin.
But one look at her picture
stole the chill from his bones.

And in the warmth, of her memory
he surrendered his body.

 

The withered shell he had lived in
fell away like dry leaves.

Casting off of earths shores, 

the cosmic wind filled his sails
carrying him to a spiritual life.

With the comming of dawn.
God's newest angel

flew to the stars
and the waiting arms

of his Soul Mate 

 

Hand in hand,

they walked together 
in the sunlight of Heaven.

 

 

 

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  • Shantti silver member
    August 3

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    Such a vivid description of death. I love way and format this is written in. It had a renosance feel that depicted the cycle of life in a subtle manner.
    Thank you for entering this in my contest. It's most remarkable


  • cazzy71
    July 13
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    thank you

    Your entry is so different to all the others I have so far read.It is cold and dark,with just a modicum of humor.This is clever,shows great insight and was a pleasure to read.I would not revise anything this poem has.The picture you used with it and the back ground add impact to the piece.I rate this very highly.


  • Guerrero
    May 26

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    ohhhh..this is so sad and yet happy to. really really great piece. after all those years he got what he wanted. beautiful write

  • Ahh a very touching write that you have here... I am not sure if it was just his time to go on... or if he actually committed suicide.

    Whichever it is it was written with much respect to this person. And honor as well.

    Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering this into my contest.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 24

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    The pain of growing old in loneliness seeps through your words...full of emotions and strong imagery with a lovely soft and comforting ending.

    Thank you for sharing!

    mystic


  • RainbowMonkeh
    January 3

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    That was a wonderful ending to a mildly sad poem. I'm glad that he finally got to be with the one that he loved. I also like how you compared him leaving his body to dry leaves, that was very interesting imagery. =


  • ChelseySmile
    December 30, 2008

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    The second last stanza was my favorite.
    Hope, and piece at last through the sweet release of death, into the arms of his love.
    Very nice poem.

    Good luck in my contest. Thanks for entering.


  • trekkergirl
    October 27, 2008

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    I absolutely love the very last stanza. It is a wonderful write. I really like your imagery here. Good job and congrats on the trophies. And thanks for sharing this and for entering it into my contest.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    October 16, 2008
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    you did a goo djob writing this. Keep up your good work. Best of luck.

    CrimsonViper


  • peregrin
    September 26, 2008
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    Wow...
    Great write,
    Thanks for the entry.


  • Christina-is-crazy
    September 22, 2008

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    Hey
    First id like to say
    this is a beautiful poem.
    I really liked it.
    I held this contest becasue my aunt just died not that long ago.
    and i wanted to see what other people
    thought and felt about ther loved ones who passed
    and there love ones who are dying.
    Such an amazing poem.
    i really like your writing
    Thanks so much for entering my contest
    i hope to see some of your other poems in my upcoming contest~



    ~~~christina

  • piccola silver member
    August 8, 2008

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    I got started and then had to stop. did you mean reaping? you have reapping ... or did you want to say reappearing ? Anyway I stumbled over it and stopped. You might want to fix it. Thank you for the entry


  • daviscth
    July 2, 2008

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    This is an awesome poem. I was actually cold as I was reading it and the ending is wonderful as well. Thanks for posting.


  • Frogzter gold member
    June 20, 2008
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    Thanks for entering and best wishes,

    Frogz~


  • Frozentearz
    June 19, 2008

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    Not sure if this one hits the soul part of this contest but it indeed expresses many thoughts,
    another great write from the heart.
    Warm thoughts.
    frozentearz

  • Honeydew
    May 27, 2008
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    your poem

    is really really beautiful....wow ..i really liked it !!!

  • JanessaKatzer
    May 12, 2008
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    i like the metaphors and the beautiful imagery in your poem!!!
    thanks for entering!! good luck!!

  • Nighttime angel
    March 29, 2008
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    I enjoyed reading this poem so very much. love will stand the test of time.. I always have believed that. they found each other again, after his passing. she was waiting for him, that is beautiful in its self. truly an outstanding poem.

    thank you for entering & good luck

    kat


  • z etoile
    March 27, 2008

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    Awe how sweet. A man meeting his wife in heaven that was so absolutely beautiful I loved this piece so much!


  • Eternally Fallen
    March 24, 2008

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    This was really good. I think you captured the essence of dying very well, and I love how it came to a close in the end. Very good, and good luck.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    March 6, 2008

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    a relatively interesting take on my contest prompt, I liked reading it, thanks for entering it is much appreciated


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 20, 2008

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    Wonderful sentiments expressed in these lines - yes, they are together again, and that is good. tough to be apart so long. A few typos, if corrected, would make this an excellent poem. Great entry into this contest.


  • pen-inhand
    February 15, 2008
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    This is beautiful. My dad waits for my mom this way, and I know one day she will take his hand and they will be reunited again for there's is an eternal love, just like the love you've described in this piece. A grand write. Best of luck to you in the contest. Kelly


  • PureRomance
    February 10, 2008
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    I love this poem. The imagery and wording you used made this into a masterpiece. God bless you and I'm sorry that you've been through this. We are all God's children and He has a special place for us all. Best of luck to you in the contest. I hope you win.

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