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Not Too Gold

You’ve kept me at an easy let go
The handcuffs behind my back
Are becoming cold
And I’ll admit,
I was too embarrassed to let you know

I miss the way the weight of the guitar
Used to hold a whimper to your name
Even though every pitch may have been crooked
And all my notes were strained
The innocence and leftovers
Sort of took all that away

Switched out for the ultimate fix
I haven’t had mine yet
Breaking by these little bits
It’s become too hard to quit

I’ll compare this next burn
To be just as drugged as the sun
As it gets its best feel
On cutting the horizon
Through the stomach
Just as I wanted to do to you

The bird’s most poisonous breath
Perched on the outermost part of my soul
Unadvised to what wingspan
Wore down yesterday
And ripped down the heavens with it
Not too gold, not too gold
I am just as blind as the bat
The sun is no friend of mine
You’re so bold, so bold
I’m so below it
So bland and pale compared to you
And you don’t even notice

We drained tomorrow in a cup
You have brought out every color in me
And then some
To expect nothing of it, I wouldn’t
But to arrest my heart
Under the first step you took towards me
I wasn’t ready
To be tamed and you weren’t ready
To be torn
I’m just as restless, and you’re just as ripped
Still, we haven’t learned a thing
Only memories and trips
Back to a feeling we’d wish we could forget
But…
I just can’t.
And that’s just it.

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  • Ellis gold member
    August 28

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    You are NOT "below" Anything. You are this website's Best Kept Secret.

    I found you! (lucky me)


  • Pisces Pieces
    February 22, 2008

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    I love the part about the guitar, probably because it's so fitting for you But I love all of it, because your writing is always so fascinating.

    When I'm reading, I'm always thinking, dang, she could take each one of these sets and make it a whole poem of it's own

    It's amazing how you can consistently come up with such unique and creative metaphors and you're always so original...and they are never the same. True, and pure, talent...you are!

    Sorry I haven't been able to keep up


    Michele


    • Tweedle Dum
      February 23, 2008
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      THANKYooo

      It's fine. I have not been keeping up either. I've been so weird latelyy. But yay! I always get happy when I see one from you cause then I know you know, that you'll say something interesting. MMM i'm HUNGREH!
      Hungry hungry hippos. ANYHOW thankyou i must go, we are getting good with guitar, me and augusta. its going real well. THANKSSSSSSSS! I will finish reading any i've missed of yours by the way!


  • Tweedle Dee
    February 11, 2008

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    OMG DUDE I LOVED THE ENDING!!!!!!!!!! I LOVED THE WHOLE THING, THIS SHOULD BE ONE OF OUR SONGS, IM SERIOUS. IT KICKS ASSS!!!!!!!!! DUDE LIKE I HAD A DREAM LAST NIGHT, AND I PRAYED TO GOD, AND I GOT ONE TEACHER RECOMENDATION ALREADY. AND IM ONLY IN FIRST PERIOD!!!!!! OH YEA

    DUDE LIKE YEA.
    I LOVED IT!!!!!!! ALL OF IT. THIS IS BY FAR ONE OF YOUR BEST. and we our going to rule the school!!!!!!! you wait dude its gonna rock. i swear dude. mannn.


    OK I G2G im going to my next period class, english. yuck.

    DUDE call me!!!!!!!!!!!! i don't know how to tell becca....

    ALRIGHT BY MAN!