Flakes fall softly
Around what one calls pity
Flying slowly into dreams
Tell me what makes it right
Shall I reverse
Can the flakes fly up?
Or am I left down?
Show me
Teach me
Tell me
For flakes keep falling
Building into snow
Crushing my hopes
Weighing me down
A contest entry
- Give me your best by xorandomxo.
600 points, ended March 29, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter All Your Dark Writes Here (Series - II) by xxRainbowDawnxx.
1500 points, ended March 27, 2008, 95 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this one, it's simple but kind of sad at the same time. Nicely done here.
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sad.
This is a sad poem, but I quite enjoyed the way you wrote it.
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wow.
amazing.
love it.
thanks for entering.
good luck.
unbreakable♥
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