my life is ruined
tears shiny glow
heartless pained
with more sorrow
glistening repurcussions
falling to the floor
instruments playing tensions
there is no cure
emotional baggage
is what ive become
fears flung flurried on a page
nothing left in the womb
Author notes
abortion option
A contest entry
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Comments
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imagery is very vivid.
I like the way your theme develops. I was wondering where we were going after I read the first verse, which I enjoyed, but by the time I finished I had no doubts of the feeling here.
It is strong emotion.
I love the alliteration and the unique rhyme. Well done
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You had some good images here, but the first verse...yeah...I'd open with the second, and add a third.
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