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rACe HoRSeS

Muscles ripple as the hooves hit the ground
Then go up again for a breath
Then hard against the dirt once again
Kicking up the dust
As they make the turn
Leading into the backstretch
And then they're off
Even faster than before
All too soon
They cross the wire
And Afleet Alex wins the race once again
Seattle Slew close behind

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  • Midnite wolf gold member
    February 19, 2008

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    the imagery of this is great, but it feels like there should be more to it somehow. its still a good write though.


  • PureRomance
    February 10, 2008

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    This poem is awesome. You did a fantastic job with this. The imagery and everything is just flawless and perfect. God bless you always and keep up the wonderful work. Best of luck to you and this poem in the contest.