my back against this cold red container
on my knees am i
dreaming of your soft touch of feeling your warmth in my arms
its not enough to know that someday i shall see you again
my heart has given up so many times and yet i do not die
my body is here but my heart died long ago
iam trapped in earthly form unable to reach out to you
we will be together until then i'll be dreaming of you
A contest entry
- Image Inspired J by HeavenScent4U.
300 points, ended February 14, 2008, 22 entries
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Comments
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this is very deep. I am assuming and I could be wrong that you took the image as someone who is yearning for someone who has passed away and them wanting to and planning on being with them again in the afterlife.
I do have a suggestion though as you have touched on a big pet peeve of mine. Some capitalization and punctuation would be nice to see in this as to make it read smoother
thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed
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this is really good
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