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cello

between my knees, against my thigh,

make your music,

low voice calling in tune

                                  whisper whisper

                                     string song

I feel your vibrations as your heart sighs

humming my name,

close my eyes

gently drawing my bow

                               back and forth

across your broad chest

massaging your neck with nervous fingertips

each note is a kiss

tender,

               licking my lips

in sweet anticipation

as we ride on waves of bars and staffs

pausing only for a

quarter rest

and a conductor’s curving arms

our love trembles

                          like a fermata

as you ask me to pluck your heart strings

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cello

Picture Credit: Cello by ~MyFinalBreath on deviantart.com

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  • unraveled
    May 13, 2008

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    nicely done Cassie... one of my favorites that i've read of yours. imagery is nicely done, it had a good flow and didn't have too much nor too little information. i liked it

    -cassidy

  • Forever Running
    April 18, 2008
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    Fantasmic

    Cassie, I had no idea that you wrote with such Bow Chaka Wow-Wow. You surprise me once again.

  • tara wilson gold member
    April 11, 2008

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    Cassie - this is so beautiful!

    very sensual & I love this part:

    "pausing only for a

    quarter rest

    and a conductor’s curving arms"

    a lovely poem!!


  • bones7
    March 27, 2008
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    Great job.


  • toomysterious
    March 22, 2008

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    Absolutely excellent

    So, beautifully lyrical, light, and airy, but erotically sensual, too. I don't play an instrument, but the feeling is there, and it is perfectly understandable. Beautiful metaphors for love and love-making. You really have a talent.


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    March 22, 2008

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    Brilliant...

    Brilliant piece here Cassie!
    I loved the metaphors, and the imagery...
    I'm in a school band, so I understand the terms you used But for thsoe who don't use music, you might want to put the definitions of fermata and other terms
    'adult-ish'

    ~Annie
    (#9 is ALMOST here!)


  • Perception
    March 11, 2008

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    Wow... this is amazing... Your words are so great... Beautiful... Amazing metaphor...

    I love your choice of words


  • Ryno
    March 8, 2008

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    I loved the metaphor you've chosen. It allowed for lots of images and abstract, yet wonderfull simple, descriptions.

    I feel this images also produced a wonderful "adultish" emotion... beautiful.

  • Westley
    February 24, 2008

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    This is lovely, really sensual and passionate. Well-done here!

    The cello is a beautiful instrument and the metaphor works well - love the drawing too...


  • stompsalot
    February 22, 2008

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    gorgeous

    this is very simply gorgeous! it leaves me plain speechless!
    very talented piece.
    many blessings *stomps


  • bloved
    February 22, 2008

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    I love this...its sensual...but not pushing it. I love the way you use the cello as an instrument for love making

    Just goregous


  • le soir
    February 19, 2008
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  • February Moon gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    Beautifully done. You rock my socks, royally.


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    This is indeed the embodiment of love and sensuality - lovely poetry! I especially loved these lines:

    "as we ride on waves of bars and staffs
    pausing only for a
    quarter rest"

    and then the slow fading of the "fermata"...sublime piece of writing - a duet of cellos and slow voices. Beautiful.

    Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with us.

    ~ Nicolette


  • flight
    February 11, 2008
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    Mmmm, very sensual, great job!
    peace to all ~flight

  • grm
    February 11, 2008

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    instruments are lovers that never fail us, and give back more than what we put into them.
    nicely played

    thanks for creating this for us


  • Darkrunn
    February 11, 2008

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    wow... It's almost sad. But I love the bond between musician and instrument you've illustrated here.

    Favorite line is: "each note is a kiss"


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 10, 2008

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    this is so beautiful sis and your wording is smazing and adds alot of effect to the picture well done with this


  • Namita
    February 10, 2008

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    This one's really sensual, lady~ Beautiful! One of your best ones, till now, I guess Just wow!~ Good luck in the contest, Cassie

    - namita

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