Best wishes in this fond adieu -
I hope that all goes well for you,
that luck runs fair and love is true,
these rare possessions given few.
I bless you now and set you free
with nonchalance; your liberty
is treasure locked without a key,
dependent on your blessing me.
In a list
Please tell me what you think.
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love this piece it all flows so nice 2gether i love it great write keep it up...
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Thank you Flowergirl, I'm happy you like this.
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Absolutely Beautiful
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Thanks shazz!
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I can but marvel at your splendor ...
and slip into the cosy blessing of your musings ... You take your natural gifts and turn them carefully into treasures ...
Love to you, Margaret. And may your blessings return like the soft hit of a silken boomerang!
Myra
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Dear Myra, thank you, from the bottom of my heart.
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only a wise one like you would be able to develop such noble thoughts and feelings ...
a perfect lesson in non-attachment and authentic love ...
thank you for this high-spirited verse,
marion
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Thank you sweetheart.
You know what they say, first comes attachment, then comes pain, and wisdom follows; or, we make mistakes through lack of experience, and we get experience by making mistakes. 
The past has no more hold on us when we can bless it for what we learned, and bless absent friends.
Have a wonderful day!
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Excellent
Like the meter, rhyme and choice of words. Well put together. This poem made me want to read more of your work, so that's what I did. I was pleasantly satisfied. Bluebird
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Thank you Bluebird, I'm happy you enjoyed your visit.
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I read this before, and sent a comment
but it didn't go, where it was meant
I lost it inspace, between you and I
a special hello, From a ryhmer guy
where do you live? I'm in B.C.
Abbotsford home, My wife and me
your poem was great, I feel your hurt
shredded pieces, Relationship Dirt...
Rudolf
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Hi Rudolf, I'm happy you like this poem. I'm living outside Canada now, but I grew up in Northern Ontario. Thank you for your rhyming response and the welcome applause.
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*EXHALE*
That exhale was out of amazement from reading this. Just beautiful.
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Thank you very much for your comment and applause, I'm happy you like this little poem.
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how soft this is .. Like an exhale.. one can almost hear it on the wind..
Beautiful
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Thank you for your lovely comment Catressa, that is the seed of a poem in itself, and I appreciate the applause. Good day to you!
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Very nice!
All partings should be so peaceful! Blessings given and received..what better way to leave?
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Thank you Maureen. Remember "leave them laughing when you go". If only all partings could taste sweet in retrospect.
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Great great job. A wonderful read for sure!
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Thank you for your comment and applause, I appreciate them!
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simple and sweet
simple and sweet
makes me think of sucking teet -
Less is more really applies to this brief yet sincere missive.Lovely sentiment and since I am a lover of rhyme I am truly loving this, thanx, conni
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Thank you for your comment conni. I love rhyme.
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Tis a great write. I rather enjoyed it!
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Thanks for reading, GingerKid!
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I love the sentiments expressed in this Margaret and they are so very rare, they reflect a positive attitude that would save so much pain if others were to adopt it, good byes are never easy but with the right attitude could become much more bearable. well expressed!
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Thank you Pari, it is so nice to see you, it has been an age. You are as lovely and gentle as ever. I'm glad that you like this poem, and the next one, thank you for applause. I can't make choices for other people, I can only adjust myself and decide to be happy anyway.
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A very lovely sentiment. It is not always easy to give others such liberty. We tend to want to be possessive, which can hinder growth.
This was a lovely poem. I'm so glad it was on the front page, or I may have missed it.
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Right you are, ten, our first impulse is to hold on for dear life, and turn life into hell. Having done it a few times, I see what my elders were talking about. Thank you for your visit, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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excuse Me please....
I forgot to leave some applause ..*smiles and throws roses (f)
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Thank you very much for your applause and appreciation, THCme. I can't say that goodbyes are ever easy, but acceptance is far less painful than resistance. If they go, bless them, if they never come back, still bless them.
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Lovely poetry of Reason
and imagistic exploration of purpose and feeling. Two monorhymes that are excellently executed. I suppose it is fair to say this poem holds several universalities.
Thank you Margaret, for your direction here. Ron.
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I am hoping one day to write something that reads so easy and lyrical. The the beat and rhyme is flawless. I enjoyed this very much.
Kelli
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Thank you Kelli Marie. I have been practicing for a couple of years in metered rhyme, it gets easier. Thanks very much for applause.
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So nice
So smooth and soft. Prefect rhyme and a lovely message.It is a pleasure to read such a poem. Give me liberty. Again excellent
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Thank you very much Bob.
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very good flow. love the line "that luck runs fair and love is true" would sound great in a song!
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Thank you Richeyjames - a very kind comment.
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very good. inspired me to do something that i should have done a long time ago. thank you
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Thank for your comment and applause - though it is still better to know that you have changed your mind.
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it was inspiring
Thank You so much for making goodbye even that much easier to say.It sounded like a very brave moment if I might be so presumptious
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Margaret, for some reason I do not read this as a poem regarding the death of someone, but more of the ending of maybe a friendship/love/relationship....but never the less it brought me a certain comfort as I lost my mom in December and we buried my mother in law this past Friday. It always amazes me how someone elses words can touch something within the reader that the author probably never intended to do and I thank you,
Blessed Be
bigz
reenie
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Hi Reenie, I'm sorry for your loss, it is very heavy.
You are right, this is more about separating from the living, but one of my losses is like this.
Any comfort that I can give is also a comfort to me. Thank you for your comment.
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Very deep, touching, and powerful My cousin is going through a rough time right now, and I have a feeling she won't last the year and this gave me peace, and reminded me what I needed to do
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That is hard to bear, Kari, without your own resources of peace through understanding. I am happy that my poem was helpful.
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If, perchance, thee I leave
with smile and fond adieu,
'tis necessary for a while
till hello our hearts renew.
Time will be of no accord-
greetings once again extend
to kindred sister of my soul,
forever treasured friend.
What a lovely poem, Margaret! Your gift is rare.
Love, Karen
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Thank you for your rhyming response, Karen, you reflect beautifully. Separations may be temporary or permanent, but no hard feelings need to be entertained. Your second stanza is true, time disappears when friends meet again.
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Fine rhyme that seems effortless.
Is it?
This is a heartfelt blessing. Because you write uncontrivedly from the heart, your work is outstanding, in the traditional school of poetry.
"Treasure" expands on "possessions" in stanza one.
The apparent paradox with box and key rings true, because there is a precondition.
Thank you for this fine poetry. Ron.
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No, not exactly effortless, though more work in thinking than in writing. I had been reading something in zen or some other philosophy, that a guard is just as much a prisoner as the one inside. This is not a physical prison, but an emotional one, and more profound for that. Freedom is the "nonchalance" that allows people to be what they are.
Thank you for your fine reading, Ron.
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Bless You...
Though not a key for blessing thee. For someone as dear as you, freely sharing blessings comes easily. Bless You in all your comings and goings and in-betweens...always. Me too. We too.
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Dear Sea, thank you for your presence and appreciation. Blessings come easily to you, and I only follow. It is a very helpful attitude.
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Deep, delightful!
The last stanza is magnificently gripping and inspiring what a refreshing write to read!! Thank you for sharing your wonderous gift!
Wishing you love, Peace, Joy, Blessings, Wisdom, 's to you and yours,
~Myst~
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Thank you for appreciation, Myst! Your comment was the first I read today, such a pleasure to receive.
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This would look well on a Valentine's card. A good exercise in rhyme.
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Thank you Keith.
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First impression: sadness, loss
And then I remember a little verse on a bookmark (of all places!) that said,
"If there's love, set it free;
If it loves, it will return. If not, it never was."
Codicil to add: Accept it.
Essentially the same idea. Must say though that your two quatrains say it better.
I know there is no other way to put it, but "sky of blue" is not as original as the rest of it.
Water reflects... or through, do, two, who, argue, few, interview, shoe, glue, adieu, review...
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I have rewritten the whole first stanza - simply farewell.
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Thank you, Terry, for considering the artistic value. The whole thought is - release the captives and bless them, thereby one is released.
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