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---{sewn away}---

 

 

you have been

at the tip of an arrow

against wounds, exposing

warmth of heart... oozing

glittering like hope


 

i have been

needle and thread

unfinished lines, straggling

hiding behind

old bandages of time


 

i've held this pocket full

of desire and dreams

suspended.. just beyond

the surface...

ties protruding


 

i want to rip through

let blood flow freely {volcanoes}

... and still, something

that tastes like fear

lingers on my tongue


 

whispering...


 

will (i)t be as lava,

torching flesh... soul consuming

ashen rock covering lines

(woven by the promise of love)

leaving destruction

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

(you have been to the point, honest, open
your heart pouring out, beautiful with hope

i've been trying to hold inside everything i feel
some escaping probably unclear as i use the past to hide behind

..
..

would my opening up cause only more damage
..)


any more translations needed?

ramblings, no sleep...
this needs something. maybe someone will add to it.

*thanks you Kj for the title -roses-

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  • Puppydog gold member
    May 17

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    DEEPLY TOUCHING!!

    One opens up and shares all, the other for whatever reason will not open up, for a good reason or a bad one it makes no difference for sorrow and pain will follow.


  • Oceanna
    May 6
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    I like the flow of this poem and the meaning behind it as well. Something many can relate to.

  • Xx Alice xX
    February 15
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    Your writes just seem to get better and better. A lot of thought in this one, well done.

  • PinkyDot
    February 12

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    Wow

    Very powerful imagery and emotions felt with this piece. I didn't require your explanations, I thought your words brought vivid ideas to mind. I loved your use of metaphors. You say that this needs something, but not much in my opinion. If anything perhaps a glimmer or suggestion of how or if the risk of opening up will or should be taken.
    No offense to Kj but I am not a huge fan of the title. I get the meaning of it but only after I read the poem a few times. Perhaps that is an area that could be enhanced to avoid having to give the translations, but I have no other suggestions to offer at this time.
    Wonderful read, thanks for sharing it!

    • LionessK Greeters member
      February 13
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      thank you much for your thoughts here.. i am always worried my words may be misunderstood especially when considering the one this was written about. i wanted to be sure.

  • EncounteredEpiphany
    February 12

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    Great Write!


    It's like jumping into a pool of water on a hot sunny day.

    You really never know the temperature until you dive in.

    Lo-Amo!!

    Salute!!!

    • LionessK Greeters member
      February 13
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      true.. though i have never been the one to dive in...all at once. i have to put my toe in first then inch my way to waist deep... then i go under, completely.
      thank you for reading
  • icebear
    February 12
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    Your thoughts are clear. I feel them .

    I say, go for it. Take the chance. We all get burned, but we sure love the fire.


  • Cocaine-Eyes
    February 12

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    this is a really pretty poem and I enjoyed reading it. I think that my favorite lines were:

    "will (i)t be as lava,
    torching flesh... soul consuming
    ashen rock covering lines
    (woven by the promise of love)
    leaving destruction"


    it's a very deep and meaningful poem. Very pretty and flowly as well.

  • Hekate gold member
    February 12

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    I can't believe I didn't see this one!! This is just amazing, beautiful and I am in awe when I read this...wow


  • Akimbo silver member
    February 11

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    I love this...

    but it makes me sad (duh!)... it's like having everything you want in a pocket but it's sewn shut... it's like wanting a hug but you've misplaced your arms. The needle and thread line is my fav.
    Best to you Kristy- always!
    Kj


  • LionessK Greeters member
    February 11
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    <333

  • scars-of-yesterday
    February 10

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    i really like this piece. but yes it dose kinda of sound like rambling. But either way this is a good poem.
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