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Hell Awaits

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Particles floating in the dust,

adorned with claustrophobic rust.

Black death crawling on the skin,

infection seeping, wanting in.

 

Rancid pits bubble and boil,

vile souls fiercely recoil.

Crushed bones coat a fractured ground,

screams and wails echo all round.

 

Fleshy tongues lacerated and slashed,

craniums split, grey matter splashed.

Desolate waves of terror unfold,

horror writhing crisp and bold.

 

Sat upon a skeletal throne,

enjoying each and every moan.

The groom to be, the devil himself,

penance for a life of wealth.

 

Eternal agony waiting for all,

that receive satan's call.

Jaws tearing flesh from broken bone,

hell awaits, welcome home. 

Author notes

Prompt; Show me what lies just behind the shadows. Make it dark and creepy and scary. I want to know what you think lies behind the shadows.
Picture credit; Hell Awaits by *k0rvis

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  • InMyFlames
    April 16, 2008

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    whoa this blew me away...
    the rhyming was sensational and the language dont get me started
    i loved this well done! thanks for entering


  • Angelic Princess21
    March 18, 2008

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    this is a very good write....

    Eternal agony waiting for all,

    that receive satan's call.

    Jaws tearing flesh from broken bone,

    hell awaits, welcome home.


    i loved that part. very good with this thank you for entering my contest. and best of luck to you


    ~Angelic Princess~


  • Timespell
    March 7, 2008

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    Excellent in every way... You have managed to keep this poem rolling of your tongue like a river of fire.

    Congrats on the gold award, well deserved.

    All the best,

    ~T.S~


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    I love your work...and could read this stuff all day. Love the pic too, good luck in the contest.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • satan-
    February 18, 2008

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    Oh. My. God. I love it Rhyming is definitely not my thing, but I love this. The images are dark and disturbing...but that's exactly what I'm looking for The last two stanzas are really excellent. Thanks for entering!


  • aboomer silver member
    February 18, 2008

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    Wow, this is great! And goes so well with the picture. I love your wording and it reads so nicely.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • ShadedRequiem
    February 18, 2008

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    Wow, this is really good and really creepy. It really did scare me. Thanks for entering a poem that makes me have a reaction like that. It's really awesome. Thanks for entering.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 11, 2008
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    Dark and forboding!! You've created a great story around the pic hun!! Love the last line!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 10, 2008

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    so this is the hell that waits for me on the other side, funny i thought the teletubbies and Barney would have been here somewhere, this is a dark and strong poem my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • WolfHeart
    February 10, 2008
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    Grisly little write! Love it - Fleshy tongues lacerated and slashed,

    craniums split, grey matter splashed.

    Desolate waves of terror unfold,

    horror writhing crisp and bold."

    If this stanza doesn't give you chills,
    nothing ever will. Very well-written and a dispenser of goosebumpies for sure.



  • Nicotine Eyes
    February 10, 2008

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    Judge #1

    This was good, I loved it. It was a story behind the picture, whitch seems like it took some work. Thanks & good luck!

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