Blood, sweat, tears
Meld into one.
I repress memories
That fateful day.
Fury
Passion
Anger
The war to do what’s right
Kill or be killed, all become one
In a fight for perfection
A fight for peace
Shattered souls along with broken plates
A sign of the times
Nothing left of personality
But bloody stains on the floor
An explosion tears through my heart
Another life is lost
But with each life destroyed, a possibility
A change
Endless, swirling change
Nothing is stable.
Nothing is sure.
Because with each step
Each bullet
Each death
They die a little more inside
Fight for what is right
Fight for what is just
Fight for what you believe in
Fight.
Author notes
lostangel07
A contest entry
- The best of the best of the best by Thedamned77.
405 points, ended February 14, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRE-WRITES! ROUNDS CONTEST!!! by Luminescence.
525 points, ended March 23, 2008, 176 entries
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Comments
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Very nicly written... so far from what I read... not my favourite .... but still done nicely.
Title- 10
Diction- 8
Syntax- 6
Wowness factor- 7
Total- 31- okay score.
Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
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I like the emphasis on certain words by having them on their own line.
Fury
Passion
Anger.
Like that. The beginning was extremely promising. I think your creativity faded into conformity slightly at the end, but altogether it's a great poem. -
Although this was emotional, it is very conventional in it's thinking. I want you to see beyond the picture. The format is also a little crude. Thank you for entering.
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Very nice job done here sweety good luck to you in the contest best wishes and much love always
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Wow hun this is amazing, you captured the suffering so well, another needless and senseless war.. you just brought it on home, well done and goodluck in the contest
Karen
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