the fabric of stitched lips
torn by cruel words.
thin strings stretched;
frosted pink foundations
of spiteful sentences.
insults uttered.
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Image by pulse-stock at deviantart.com
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A contest entry
- pif quickie by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
300 points, ended February 10, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Firstly - how fake does that image look
And I love this - short and intense. But you do write a lot better in length, I think. Your punches are short and sweet in quickies but I do fall head over heels for longer writes with you
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I like the image because of the lip ring.
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this is exactly what I was looking for and holds deep emotion and imagery within your words. well done with this
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You write too many sad poems.
But I love your imagery... Beautiful, wonderful, fantastic!
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I think this is a very powerful, stunning write... best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Oh my! Very creative and original take on the prompt. Pain inside is often spat from lips parched from souring kisses. Sweet thoughts become tainted by acids of boiling blood, but even more devastating, is the twisted attempts of giving love, that comes out distorted due to a fragmented heart. Beautiful take on the prompt my friend. Best wishes in the comp
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wow, this was really good..I loved the emotions felt in this , and the imagery with it. Very very well done here.
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I love this one!
Great work here and good luck.
Jeremy0826
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