Come with me; I am luminous, candle of radiant good,
Your rich reward for toil in faith.
Brighter than the light that woke you from mother's womb;
the epitome of warmth, and hope assailing on winds of Love.
I am gathered forethought- after realization was summoned,
denial pitched back to its ooze-cavern to abode with bile.
You know me, but are gripped with darkness, fear, and Ego.
I am easily seen in a mother's single tear-
when childbirth pains back, and brings forth bellows of life.
Even heard in wails and moans from bearing down,
a droplet leaked from window's view, breath's first sight.
Insistent ray through forest limbs know to praise me
Beaming down upon lifted leaves that yearn for my glow.
Shrouded ebony night-sky with pin-pricks as reminder...
Illumination in its silent scream, comes not by surprise.
Just above, in Eastern loft , where Earth and Heaven kiss;
Witness the brightest reflection of Spirit Glory.
It is seen deep in the eyes of all humanity. Light!
There are mansions, storehouses with desired treasures.
Your signature adorns these chests, scribed in indelible ink.
Mine is but a whisper, like that of feather's blow,
Priority and Promise avowed from private prayer, obliged.
I am the lighthouse-lamp that steers tossed vessels
on angry oceans from Zeus-rain, my lantern floods miles.
As I am beacon-lustered, and always aglow.
Darkest jet night composes with aurora painted brilliance
a dancing cosmos, pastel hues in sparkled-spectrum array.
Come with me, and feast endlessly, it is already Yours. Light!
Author notes
I wrote my own response to my poem "Come With Me!"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3883085
An "Inverted" Progressive Poem
Begin with the greater amount of lines and progressively work to one line.
This is a Seven Stanza "Inverted" Progressive poem.
Stanza Seven - 7 Lines
Stanza Six - 6 Lines
Stanza Five - 5 Lines
and so on...
Wanna try Your hand at the form? Here's a contest for ya!
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2390020
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Please tell me what you think
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Very well done
Its amazing how you write and bring to all thoughts of life and serenity as each day unfolds
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It has been awhile since I have read your work. And it seems my memory had dimmed of just how well you write. I like the format, and will have to study it up, as I am hoping ot get back into writing. Thank you for writing something that inspires me! Athena
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You make my heart dance!
"Just above, in Eastern loft , where Earth and Heaven kiss;Witness the brightest reflection of Spirit Glory.
It is seen deep in the eyes of all humanity. Light!"
Awsome poetess supreme!
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Very Deep Poetry!
I really enjoyed this tho I don't read nor write long poetry that often. Keep up the beautiful work.
"BOO"
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I had to read the other one first before I commented on this one and all I can say is wow. I really enjoyed both and this one was really the angel on the other shoulder. brilliant, thanx, conni
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Wonderfully WEaved Sis~
Thanks for being such a light for so many to follow.
Thanks for healing the pain before it comes tomorrow.
You are special, and I know you care so much.
Each poem you weave with wisdom, in my heart you touch.
Be blessed always,
Thanks for sharing, much love, brother Timothy
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First I went to your author's page and was dazzled by all of your trophies. So I just had to read a poem, and will be back for more. "Light!" Brilliant use of delicious metaphors, and I love your form. I saw someone had written another invention of yours. The way you wrote this poem was very effective, so calm, so serene.I can really see your spirituality in this poem.
Shana
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My favorites were stanza 1 and 2. Those spoke to me the most but this entire poem was brilliant. I love your heart Renee.
(I also love the contest promotion)
Splendid.
with love,
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very strong write. You can really feel the emotion. Well done indeed.
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this is awesome and oh how the pains of childbirth bring such light to you life! I can definetly relate
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I like this form and I think ill give it a whirl.
As always dear you are awesome bar none!!!!
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A really nice poem
This style is an interesting one indeed. I'll come back to this sometime to day for another look.
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amazing
i am so happy i clicked on this poem,
not only did i enjoy reading your work
but i also felt like it took me to a far away place.
almost like reading a chapter from narnia.
i love poems like this.
thank you
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Excellent, sister. Wonderful "response" to the first write. Fave lines:
I am the lighthouse-lamp that steers tossed vessels
on angry oceans from Zeus-rain, my lantern floods miles.
As I am beacon-lustered, and always aglow.
Dez
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nice job, this is my first taste of an, "inverted" progressive poem, i think. I may try it sometimes, though overall I prefer free form, I enjoyed this very much. It flowed well and some of the lines impressed me very much.
"Come with me; I am luminous, candle of radiant good,
Your rich reward for toil in faith.
Brighter than the light that woke you from mother's womb;
the epitome of warmth, and hope assailing on winds of Love." in the first stanza and well as,"a dancing cosmos, pastel hues in sparkled-spectrum array." in the 6th. thanks for sharing. nice job.
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Written.
This is written very well and before I go to bed tonight this is very comforting. You have excellent imagery and therefore this was worth the click.
. Rewarded 4
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Beautiful poem. It's too vague for me to reflect anything of the meaning. You can only point at some things though with words. It's difficult to encompass them completely. So this open ended piece is beautiful in its own right. And I'm glad to see you haven't lost your talent at all, but have made it loud, yet encompassed in subtlety.
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Fantastic penning. Really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.
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Excellent
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"Come with me; I am luminous, candle of radiant good,
Your rich reward for toil in faith.
Brighter than the light that woke you from mother's womb;
the epitome of warmth, and hope assailing on winds of Love."
Dammit, Woman. You are just TOO good. 
Gorgeous penning, Renee. I have written responses to others' writing & have re~written a few of my own, but not like this. Wowzer, Sweetie. Impressive stuff on this page, my Friend. Wanda
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