Remember how we talked all night,
your folks had gone away,
We rambled through the deep dark times,
back to the light of day.
I still want you.
Remember when your foot got caught,
in the hay rig,made me cry,
How i held you in the ambulance,
But i never told you why.
I still need you.
Remember at the senior prom,
laughed so much we couldn't stop crying,
How you comforted me in the fall that year,
when i found out mom was dying.
I still remember.
Remember the honeymoon by candlelight,
a power-outage due to storms
and the first born, trying to register him
getting tangled up with forms.
I still have that pen.
Remember all the bad times we had,
how we struggled yet still pulled through,
I can't remember the bad times,
All i can remember is you.
I still adore you.
Remember I said i would never leave you,
I'd still be here at the end of the line,
It's been fifty years now and counting,
But your still my only valentine.
I always will.
QUOTE :- The rainbows you can see are the reflection of my tears,
but they're happy ones, my valentine for years.
Author notes
option#1QUOTE :- The rainbows you can see are the reflection of my tears,
but they're happy ones, my valentine for years.
fo;;owed by option #3
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Comments
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I thought this was pretty good... I liked the non-rhyming lines in-between, they really added something to the poem. Good job and thank you for entering my contest.
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This is so true... It brings back memories of mine, I don't know if that's a good thing or a bad, I'll let you know. Nicely written though.
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awww
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My breathe was taken away by this write, it truly is beautiful. Each line drew me in further wanting to know what hapened next and how does it end wowee I loved this.
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very nice
The separated lines are very effective. This poem gave me the feeling that the one you are writing to has passed...I wonder if I am accurate. To be somewhat critical, the first part of the poem seems more personal and image filled, the latter not so much so. Overall a very good piece. Nice job
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OMG...excellent...good luck....
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sighs...
so sweet...romantic and so strong in devotion! congrats on this lovely poem and for many years of marriage.
Thank you for sharing this wonderful valentine!
blessings,
Michelle
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This is fitting for Hallmark for sure.
The only thing is the actual number 50 years
would not work for card companies. All and all
lovely valentines day poem.
Red
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