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strobe

 

rest will come

late in the heavy twilight

when birds are still

save the one lone song of

a nightingale


sleep will come

like moondark waters

flowing in with the tide over

long faint shoals of

moonlit memory


death will come

slowly quietly

each thing lulled into shadow

until even campfire embers

have ceased to glow


dreams will come

twisting up through the void

with all the force of longing

urged by a burning thirst

for just one drop of light

 

 

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  • phoenixonfire
    March 14

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    I was always fascinated by ur name..so i finally thought I would read it!! This one is deep...it goes down way to deep the await for peace salvation dreams is so intense yet so serene...it makes me want to indulge my thoughts in them!! Last line is my favourite...it lingers in my mind! Glad i read this!


    pri
  • Rediscover
    February 19

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    I'm a hospice nurse

    This describes some deaths I've actually seen.It also reflects the death of a relationship to me.In a fashion
    in which they all should end.Brilliantly penned.

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  • W B Burkholder
    February 18

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    THis is a fine piece of work, your renderings of visualistic expression shine through, each stanza painted a wonderful picture, thoroughly enjoyed this

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  • Labefaction
    February 12
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    Great poem. I really like it! I found it rather depressing and very beautiful.


    "sleep will come

    like moondark waters

    flowing in with the tide over

    long faint shoals of

    moonlit memory"


    My favorite stanza, especially the first two lines.

  • a dozenglassroses
    February 12
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    Loved this one great job!

  • yourbentangel
    February 11

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    I am on the fence!

    ALright, I have to admit that I did not like it the first time through...Couldn't figure out why, so I go back and re-read. I finally figured it out... TO me, and only to me.. the stanzas seem out of order. IT seems that dreams should come after, (or even before) sleep, not after death. The words? Beautiful, you have that way of putting words down and making them right. The content? Loved it!!!!!!!!!!!

    • Zahhar gold member
      February 12
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      ah, but here "life" is the dream. so it would have to come after death.
  • Virgoan
    February 9

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    Sir,

    At first I don't really appreciate the subtleness of this piece per stanza and as a whole. The good thing is after reading it three times aloud it moved me and my senses for reasons that only poetry knew - the love and essence of it.

    The last two lines of every stanza manages to create perfection as it concludes each strobe of thought to the readers.

    'The growth of this piece is wonderful'.

    Thanks for sharing and keep this site with pieces like this.

    HENSLEY




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