As I sit in the lunch room
I smile my deathly smile,
All around me,
Fat filled food,
Sugar filled energy drinks.
I open up my lunch box,
And pull out my lunch,
A carrot stick with no dip,
I take a few bites, then excuse my self to the restroom,
Over the toilet I go,
All the bile in my stomach gone,
The world goes black
For just a minute,
as I stand up,
And wipe off my mouth,
I begin walking down the hall,
Back too my seat,
But again the world goes black,
I fall to the floor,
Someone calls an ambulance.
I go into therapy,
I told them I was just too fat,
They told me that I was too thin.
"You are lying."
"No, the reason you passed out is that your body just started shutting down."
"Yeah right."
"Would you like us to get a scale?"
"Go ahead, make my day. Humiliate me by freaking weighing me, telling me that I am too thin."
I stared at the scale, just a few pounds heavier than my sibling, and he was seven.
They started monitoring me, not even letting me into the bathroom alone.
But I started feeling better.
I started writing,
Then came recovery.
A contest entry
- For Teenagers by musik-freek.
450 points, ended February 23, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Need Motivation... (overcoming an eating disorder) by HeartbreakHeroine-x.
950 points, ended May 20, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ohh this is good. Wondering just something you thought of or true?
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Something I thought of. I know I am skinny but I do not go to such lengths to keep it that way. I really and truthfully want to gain some weight (I am classified as moderately underweight.)
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Good I am glad that you weren't like that. I think that you would like my new poem we really had the owl in the front yard a Barred owl it was huge!!!!!
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Cool. I am avioding staying inside for too long. (Taking Lacey out.) So I now have bug bites up and down my leg. I also smell.
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ha I have four mosquito bites on my leg it looked down at us and I ran mommy said that made it almost swoop down and attack me it was like opps!
didn't want that to happen.
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XD Poor you. I hope the owl is ok though.
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Yes it is okay it flew off and I noted that it was silent as it did. I watched it. It was so cool
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Overall this was a good write; you tell the story well. Only critique is that the ending is a bit weaker than the rest of the poem-- it seems, at least to me, like you still had more to say but either weren't sure how to say it or didn't want to make your poem longer. It seemed... rushed, I suppose.
Other than that, well done-- a good narrative poem; thank you for your entry...
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Thanks, I did not know how to end it. I seriously thought that I would never stop writing this poem. See I had to change it, because when it ended it stopped at the second time she passed out, and it read, "Then it all went black for the last time."
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It sounds as if you know how this feels. If you don't then you did a great job! But i think it would be a bulimic not an anorexic because bulimics vomit and anorexics just don't eat. Thanks for your entry.
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Personally no, I am skinny, only due to a fast metabolism. You are welcome.
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very strong. great write. best of luck in the contest.
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Thanks.
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