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To The Clock She Owed It All

Picture Number 9

 

 

She went walking half past midnight, 

After she had received her terrible news,

She didnt want to  listen,

to beleive that what they say is true,

 

Cutting threw her soul like scissors,

The words they spoke so clear,

"the cancers getting to your lungs"

Her bodys overwelmed with fear,

 

As shes sarrowing in her misery,

She passed this giant clock,

Ticking away so peacefuly,

Her body's forced to stop,

 

She placed her hand upon the window,

And look upon the clock,

It tells her she doesn't have too long,

Before her clock has stopped.

 

It tells her go on with life,

Before its taken away,

To live on with her hopes and dreams,

To go on about a normal day.

 

"But its not normal you fail to see,"

She spoke it so sincere,

"Its cancer ive got filling me,"

"I dont have much longer here..." 

 

 This clock it laughs at her explaination

"And thats your point refuse you see"

"Before you reach for final days you need

To live life free."

 

To this the girl shot up,

Laying in her cot,

Analizing this dream..,

It really ment alot.

 

No longer would she cry,

But she would live life until her death,

And have apsolutly no regrets,

When she takes that final breath. 

 

To the clock she owed it all,

It helped her realize the good,

And know that she should live life great,

Just as she always should. 

 

 --Caitlyn Davis

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

 

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Author: Caitlyn Davis [[xxxScard-Lovexxx]]

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  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    August 1, 2008
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    It had potential, but when I found myself able to count the spelling and grammar-errors, I just stopped paying attention. It only takes 30 seconds to spell-check your poems, and it's well-worth the result, since the readers will be better able to follow your work. Shame, since the idea was a good one.

    Thanks for entering.


  • crystallynnbradford
    June 18, 2008
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    wow


  • completely mad
    April 15, 2008

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    cancer is such a horrible thing, I lost my grandfather to it...and i think he lived life to the fullest too...thank you for entering this piece
    completely mad


  • Jasmine Minx
    April 9, 2008

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    everyone should be like this. for regrets color our aura and make it hard for us to see the potential in life and so we only see the pain in life.

    ali


  • Never Fall in Love
    February 25, 2008

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    Run this through spell-check, I'll be back to check again.

    Good Luck in the contest
    Never ♥

  • DeathsSweetKiss
    February 9, 2008

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    Beautiful

    There are very few poems about ones final days that silence me. This work is so beautiful and filled with acceptance and a apprication for life that there is no way to describe the feelings it instills in my being. Truely so very beautiful.

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