Look in the mirror,
Staring back at you,
Is the reason he's not here.
Looking at you,
Is the broken face,
Of the girl he once loved.
Watch as the sun sets behind,
Heat pounding on the back of your head,
Plunging your face into the cool water.
Lungs expanding,
Cool water running over your skin,
Would it be worth coming up for air?
Just to see your face,
Look into your eyes,
And know he is not there.
Please tell me what you think
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wow, this is amazing. absolutely amazing. i was nearly in tears reading this. it is soooo beautifully written and your imagery was fanastic. plus, i could really connect with it, and it hit a nerve. wow, simply amazing.
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So many times the choices we make are ours to take blame for, one way or the other. Many times when things go wrong, we blame others, not really accepting the fact that the fault was ours to make, and we made it. Liked the take on this thought - easy to read and understand. Good flow and message sent in these words.
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excellent
wow..imagery is fantastic..you can hear her heart cries..to be able to pen those feelings..is wonderful..gripping write..thanx so much for sharing..blessings..
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Powerful
I can relate..I guess we really can only look at ourselves and try to have some acceptance about what 'is' not what we want! Thank you for your verse...very nice! -
That's very sad... I think that this could have been a little more emotional... with more personality and what not.. however for the most part it was not bad... I like the basic concept. Well done.
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