As zephyr kisses in tender sway
on nature's carpet I quietly lay
listening to each and every sound
echoing to me from all around.
Earth resonates beneath my feet
as I become part of the beat
a pulsating dance of harmony
my soul at peace in feelings free.
Hues of spring shout out their glory
a witness to God's creation story
brightest yellows, gentle pinks
in perfumed scents the world's in sync.
When rain in softest mist does fall
I stretch right out and stand up tall
swirl around to catch the drops
a dance I never want to stop.
Sun returns in rainbow's glow
and once again nature's on show
I sit in awe at such great bliss
and thank the Lord that I exist.
Author notes
Topic... love, spiritual, nature
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A contest entry
- contest for rhyming poems by Manoj Sanyal.
375 points, ended February 15, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow...this is such a very lovely poem...I've seen and felt the beauty of nature for you've presented them elegantly and exquisitely...and truly we have to thank the Lord for He created a marvelous Earth...congrats on the silver!
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Lovely poem.
Thanks for your participation.
Best wishes and good luck,
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very good rhyme scheme not forced very natural word 'stop' in 2nd to last stanza brings reader to a halt leaves the last stanza as an afterthought VERY GOOD WRITE + COMPOSITION thanks for sharing regards zaj [as far as 'analyse' i will leave that to far better discerners of poetry AND first line is to me almost too much title is quite appropriate]
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wow fantastic words my friend a pulsating dance of harmany my soul at peace in feelings freea beautiful line
hues of spring shout out their glory
a witness to god's creation story
the sun returns to rainbows glow
and once again nature's on show
I sit in awe at such great bliss
and thank the lord that I exist
this is peacful write of briliance
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I like strong images
Similar to a piece that I got called "Energy". nature sings its glory to God. Life worships life. Lines 5-6 show your part
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An elegant yet simple write. I like this, I like the oneness that it depicts (become part of the beat).
Only one point: the third line of the final verse is a syllable too long - could this be slightly rephrased?
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Most Beautiful
A poem that gives the reader a touch of nature. Your words were so beautiful and indeed spiritual. After reading your poem I wanted to go into a field and just smell the grass and then lay down, gaze at the sky and watch the clouds go by. I would then thank God I am alive. Thanks for such a beautiful poem. You must be a beautiful person.
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god has bleesed us with so many blessings-your poem remembers us of his many blessings.you have stressed that nicely.
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Excellent...good luck...
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wow this is beautiful and inspiring gran your words hold alot in them and i love the imagery your amazing
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Great write. I love your poems a lot.
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