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~ Faceless Branch

 

Upon life's gravel
my spirit has failed to crawl.

I am within the realm

of blocked open doors.

 

Afraid to stand upon the

thorns of poisoned failure...

My soul wilts

within the silence,

of inner upheavel.

 

 ~a faceless branch,

starved of visual desiring thirst.


My unspoken tears
shadow the footprints of eternal time,

As tommorrow's hunger
echos within unknown skies...

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  • xorandomxo
    February 13, 2008

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    wow this really went with the picture.
    i loved the whole poem.
    thanks for entering.
    good luck.

    unbreakable♥


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 12, 2008

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    A great threshold piece. You can feel the teetering, the seeking and the closing lines linger with you. I sense rebirth and yet the pheonix has yet to flame Very nicely done


  • Thedamned77
    February 12, 2008

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    Wow...I really to love this. It's so abstract and beautiful. Thank you for entering this in my contest. This is my favorite part:
    Afraid to stand upon the
    thorns of poisoned failure...
    My soul wilts
    within the silence,
    of inner upheavel.

    The worda are just gorgeous and dripping with emotion. I can feel the passion in this piece. I especially love "Afraid to stand upon the thorns of poisoned failure" I saw this as meaning that sometimes when we fail we're scared to try again for fear of failing again. Well I love this poem a lot. Thanks again.


  • pnktrky
    February 11, 2008

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    very well said... i liked it a lot. the ideas thrown around are great and of most importance to everybody.


  • maralisa silver member
    February 11, 2008

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    wow i love your poem it says so much in depths a faceless branch starved of visual desiring thirst shadow the footprints of eternal time i love it good luck and keep penning a well desearved award


  • sweetgirlwa
    February 9, 2008
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    I really enjoyed this. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • My Souls Reflection gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    Wow Tracey, this is a fantastic take of the pic.
    You are one hell of a poet and you've well and truly shown how it's done.

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