Rambling thoughts incoherent
Whittle and weave together
Becoming uncomfortably apparent
Vehemently violent implementations tethered
Liquidity of behavior makes me transparent
Validating vindictiveness
Apathetic these transactions
Bring bold men to actions
Carnivorous carnival attraction
To blood splatter reactions
Lead to regrettably pleasing satisfaction
Aggressive in your assertiveness
You’ve bludgeoned the point
Beyond recognition
Till misunderstanding disjoints
And sears up sedition
To fuel Neanderthal mindlessness
In the blundering blur
Passion creviced in the desire
Till white knuckles vice red
Waking the previously obscure
Beating an effect that won’t tire
Because the subject is dead
Basking in blood blush of your witlessness
In the wake of hapless violence
That only evidences impotence
Sparking from meager dissonance
Brooding in the convicting silence
Primeval, the human err of thoughtlessness
Author notes
by andywontdie
if you're curious and didn't catch it, the title refers to the cliche, beating a dead horse. enjoy.
This is my bronze entry for The Three Way Split contest
A contest entry
- Bones contest by bones7.
500 points, ended March 4, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cliche's and Common Sayings by Shancy Fayre.
500 points, ended February 15, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Three Way Split -Gold, Silver, and Bronze by 2lullabyhaven.
475 points, ended April 24, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very nice and you kept to the 40 line rule, impressive
Thanks for your entry
lol
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A nice job. A mouthful of words, too. Best of luck in my contest. Shancy.
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That is amazingly dead on of the purpose of this contest!
That was amazing how you used the prompt.
The sort of style.
Great.
I would say good luck in my contest but it's apparent you don't need luck
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lol.
Here is your prompt.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3896155
If you want to take a Quote from my poem,That is fine,Put quotation marks around it though.
Try your best and good luck
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