(Sometime they come when I'm sleeping
They make me feel complete
Strength and power divine, truly unstoppable
A Feeling of perfection, brooding lust
I can do anything with them at my side
Within my body, my mind, my blood
Together we are one, we are relentless)
Taste of flesh, the devils right hand
The original evil, you'll never understand
I'm the son of Satan, I'm the spawn of Baal
Bringer of Destruction and the Forces of Hell
Don't speak my name with love, don't say it with affection
I'll give you a bigger disappointment then the crucifixion
(x4) I won't die for you
I won't fucking die for you
(x4) (I'm) Relentless
Hatred Blinding, Fury Binding
Faces Burning, Stomach Turning
Sirens Singing, Gargoyles Bringing…
...Rage and hate, to take me down
They've taken over, now I'm gone
(x4) We won't die for you
I won't fucking die for you
(x8) (We're) Relentless
Author notes
Ever hear a voice in your head? Ever wonder what it would be like if just once you could let them take over? Ever wonder about what it would be like to have your foot on the throttle with someone else behind the wheel?
Psychosocial- Slipknot
A contest entry
- SEEKING AP FAMILY by Three Doves.
525 points, ended February 25, 2008, 36 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Talking to yourself 2 by Janice M Pickett.
1200 points, ended November 15, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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By the way, I forgot to say this on the main page: Include your username in the poems. You can enter up to 4 more.
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Thanks for the entry! You did a GREAT JOB on this one! It truly sounds like something Slipknot would do, and considering this is probably my all time favorite song, I can't believe someone could do it justice!
Good Luck! Lillie
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Nice work. That's something to think about. Good luck
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Very good write here. It would make a good song I think. Best of luck to you poet in this contest....
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Nicely said. Kind of reminds me of something that Slipknot would write... on their older albums of course =] Good job, and yes, I often wonder about that little voice lol...
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crazy... nice write thanks for entering
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weird. I really liked it. this is sooooooooooo kewl. i think i will read everything you've ever wrote!
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Powerful, deep, and full of emotion. A brilliant piece this is. Well done.
Wayne Leon
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Because of the abundance of entries... I am quick commenting and not breaking down the score.... your score is... 38... out of 40.. nice.. Thank you for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
Lumin -
wow i wasnt looking for a song
but this is good
i am glad that you entered it
thank you for entering!!
**kat
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Very dark write, excellent wordplay, captivating rhythm and flow. Perfectly portrays being caught up and eventually losing control. Your author's note gives an interesting addition as well. Thaks for this entry.
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Oh, I really dId like this ^.^
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My dislike of prewrites is... slightly overwhelmed by my pride at a song in one of my contests. While it is evil, alas I am not terrified. Still, very worthy of an HM - thanks for the entry...
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This is a great piece of work. It is very well written and shows alot of emotion.
Thank you for entering my contest!!!
~EnJeru~
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I loved this poem/song from the moment I read it in your blog... decided since I joined site months ago to read your stuff it was about time I added my own I miss you dear *hugs* Amber
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GREAT WRITE
YOU DEFINITELY DON'T HAVE A PROBLEM WITH EXPRESSING YOURSELF AND I LOOK FORWARD TO LISTENING TO THE SONG. I CAN SEE THE LIGHT IN YOUR DARKNESS FOR YOUR TALENT COULD ONLY COME FROM ABOVE. IN THE HOUR OF NEED THE LAUGHTER YOU HEAR WILL BE FROM THE DEPTHS BELOW. YOU REALLY DID DO A FANTASTIC JOB. I WELCOME YOU MY BROTHER of DARKNESS.
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Ooooo Dark! This write has a pace about it.. definitely relentless! Very intense! Hmmm yes I wonder what it would be like...
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Definately dark. Thanks for the enrty and good luck.
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