My name is Time
I am not thine
No man or beast shall ever
Accompany me to the end
because I go on forever.
I spin the earth
I move the tide
with my power you shall weather
I heal your wounds
I shine new moons
I'm the only, there's no other
I can't be bought, saved or fought
because I go on forever.
Please tell me what you think
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well written...and spoken too.
This is a bold time...a transition time....i see you
feel it too...when the winds will not ask permission
to cast all that is polluting our insides and out....
unsure...I live in the lands of volancoe Mt. St.Helen
where stands strong and rebuilds her dome of splendor!
ears/Seattle, WA.
many a breeze will gush strong forces yet to come,
stay strong, and keep your solid foundation!
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Hey thanks, I really appreciate it!
I really liked this poem, although poems about time and such are trite, I appreciate them so much when they actually speak to me, which this did. -
this was just beautiful!! I really love this.. I'm actually speechless, I have no idea what to say and that is really rare..If it is ok with you I would like to put this on my page or in one of my columns. I would put a link to your page with it as well!! if not thats fine as well... But anyway, again great write!!
Angel
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Very insightful and interesting...I liked it! Good job!
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tempus fugit
this is nicely written, clean and fresh
My favorite lines:
I can't be bought, saved or fought
because I go on forever. ( I don't mind the repeat; it fits)
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This is awesome and describes time in the essance very well!
I can't be bought, saved or fought
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This is a really cool poem and it's deep yet not at the same time. I really love your use of the word "time" in the overall poem
Great work, you've done really well here.
Keep writing, never stop!
Doodles
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wow fantastic write i spin the earth i move the tide i heal your wounds i shine new moons a fantastic write i love these lines keep your pen flowing
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Wonderful
Avalin, I'm sorry I haven't been around but your always in my thoughts. It's nice to read your work. This is an exceptional piece.
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Thank you for the comment! I'm glad you liked it
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OK like the idea very good AND the first off-rhyme 'time - thine' does not add to the poem the rest i enjoyed kinda a 'weak ending' maybe an additional sentence before 'i go on forver' to wrap it up with the first stanza? yes/no? a VRY GOOD idea needs minor work to make it stronger good title great opeming very good last line needs some minor tinkering/addition as far as:"I'm the only, there's no other" kinda trite/self-evident/common idea ALL-IN-ALL a promising start to what could be a really fine write thanks for sharing regards zaj
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I liked this one... It was very different, the idea behind it. I had to think about it a little bit in places - which is always good - to leave some to the imagination..
I think the ending was a bit awkward, with the word "Forever"... Perhaps you should use a different word - I don't know it just seemed a little bit awkward in my mind.
But, I really like what this poem contained. It really had me thinking, and it even put a good image in my mind.
Nicely penned ~
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awesome
you emote power and strength..and your repeating line...because I go on forever..brilliant..excellent write..thanx so much for sharing..blessings, robin
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excellent!
Every word rung true!
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wow!
lovely wordplay here. The first stanza gave power and time seemed majestic. I love "I move the tide". It added strength to time.
It becomes softer though and in conclusion, time gives you the choice. but it still stays strong with the last line. very powerful piece.
love,
transit
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Lovely
A lovely poem of infinite scope. It reminds me of the Psalms where David say "Teach us to number our days" wisdom comes to those who ponder such matters. Once again a lovely poem which I truly enjoyed reading. -
GREAT WORK
I love this poem its just right out there and is very true. all do try to buy save or even bottle life but it just goes faster cause life was only sent on how to save it instead of living it nice work
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