She feels the gentle breeze
caress her skin
awakening desires
held deep within.
The passion of her thoughts
inspired by him
who raised her to the heavens
like the wind.
Her innocence was lost
with such delight
in the pleasures shared
throughout the night.
She opened up her heart
to let him in
and she blossomed from the child
she's always been.
Author notes
Option #10 Wind beneath me"--
The Sensual sensations in the loss of innocence
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A contest entry
- Pif and Inspire :- Many Options by Reptile Lady.
825 points, ended February 9, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Innocence or Decadence... ??? by Ithica.
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Comments
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I like the flow here, and the image was really vivid.. I have read a lot of your poetry and I must say that you have a very good talent with pulling your readers into what you write.. I really like that.. well done.. best of luck..
Angel
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i like the rhythm and sound of this piece. there is a soft breeze within words from thoughts to readers....very nice.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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so beautiful. Ii really love the first few lines above all. She feels the gentle breeze caress her skin awakening desires held deep within. The passion of her thoughts inspired by him who raised her to the heavens like the wind.
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What a wonderful vision of love's first passion. Incredible write with an amazing depth of emotion. Wonderful and tasteful, thanks for entering.
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I was amazed this worked so well. Very easily adapted to the present theme... Sometimes the loss of innocence is everything it shouls be ...and more! Thank-you for a lovely entry!
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Wonderfully written, it was like being taken there, or mabey it was just remembering when. Truely wonderful work.
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Truly breath taking!!! You did an amazing job with the prompt and your words spoke sure sensuality with eloquence!!
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Truly amazing are your words and her inner thoughts paint such sensual passion.
A wonderful way to lose your innocence
Thank you for your entry
Julie -
Now this is the way true poetry is supposed to be.....beauty in inspiring hues of passion...smiles, Terry
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