Primeval mind
espies the curious stone
Solitary Soldier
in a fire ring army
Blistering cold
encourages more fuel
Blazing inferno
licks the emerald oddity
Green flames
glowing particulates dance
Golden tears
weep from the crying rock
Morning's cool
sadness now solid and sharp
Primeval mind
forever in the past.
Author notes
This is how I think Copper was discovered.
A contest entry
- Copper by porksnorkel.
900 points, ended February 22, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
An honest citique is well accepted
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This is amazing what beautiful words you have used in this poem.
I had no idea til the end and in your authors notes what it really related too.. and now I know I can say this really is a masterpiece
Hugs x
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I'm waitng for us to be send back to the days before the "Information Age" Stupid man blows bomb. EMP destroys machine. Man must talk to each other. NO more thumb disease from texting or typing. LOL Good luck, my man. One.
Dez
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LOL Are you sure hehe Great write Good luck with this in the contest. Hope you at least win an Honorable Mention
LOL Just kidding GO FO Gold. Love Ya
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