she hears the thud of her foot steps as she walks down the stairs
but she isnt really sure
that shes really even there
the heart within this little girl
lays within the rest in the world
no one knows the neglect
no one sees her cry
she feels so alone
she would just rather die
screaming crys from the depths of her heart
echo like a voice
hidden in the dark
she reads about all the boys and girls
whos love surpases the hate in the world
but the stories arnt like her life
crying and scared
in the middle of the night
she wishes so much
that she wasnt alone
maybe her heart wouldnt have hardened to stone
her life is a fatel screaming pain
like standing sick in the pouring rain
she knows that if she crys today
she'll cry a river and float away
Author notes
Option 6: Give me your best RHYMING POEM!!!!
A contest entry
- Affective Effects by FlurryOfDancingFire.
525 points, ended March 5, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS!!!!!!!!! AND PREWRITES!!!!!!! by Ale E.
600 points, ended March 22, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Awww. Wow. This is so sad. But I absolutely loved the ending lines.
she knows that if she crys today
she'll cry a river and float away - simply amazing!
Very nicely done. This has good flow too. Thank you for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck!
ale xox -
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thank you i had intended for that to be a hyperbole
-jessi
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Wow...
I really like this piece... It tells a very sorrowful, though painfully realistic story. The lines
"her life is a fatel screaming pain
like standing sick in the pouring rain
she knows that if she crys today
she'll cry a river and float away"
seem most powerful, most meaningful to me; I read them again and again. Amazing piece; good luck in my contest.
~Flurry
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