Why
do these things you do
Why
ruin so many
Why
can't I do anything
Why?
Author notes
The ultimate question is "why".
A contest entry
- I want you to touch me so bad!!!!!!!!! (And make that a Quickie too) by Ryno.
300 points, ended February 10, 2008, 9 entries
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I luv it, awesome and you can write awesome lil poem thingies
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It may be the ultimate, but don't underestimate yourself.
I'm sure theres a lot you can do.
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intersting
i like your use of repatition
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Well... I honestly think that this could be much deeper than this... I mean it's just too simple... to really touch a person... I mean that's just my opinion but it needs more personality, more emotion I think... or maybe this is what the host is looking for I don;t know... good luck.
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Hmmm
Interesting you bring that up, because I thought the exact same thing while writing it... But as I read over it, something told me to leave it simple. I will keep this poem, but it has really sparked an interest to me and will be my inspiration for a much deeper poem wiht more emotion...
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