on the outside he may be cruel
but you look deeper he is caring
when i look at snape i see a great loving guy
just give him a chance
he has had to deal with lots of things in his life
so try to understand him
smile at him when you get the chance
maybe just maybe you may get on back
some people avoid him and hate him
well this is wrong because hes human too
respect him and treat him with kindness
someday someone will soften his cruel outer shell
snape is not the bad man you think he is
so give him a chance to prove it
if you keep acting kind towards him one day he will return the favor
so here is to turning snape into his true self
A contest entry
- The Potions Master by DeadlyPoetic88.
300 points, ended February 11, 2008, 4 entries
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Comments
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Well written, But to me it didnt seem to flow. The ending had a really long line in it. I think it needs a little more, as well as correction to the last stanza. Other than that it was pretty good. Oh and capitalize the I's!
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This is a cute little write you have here. I like it. It think it needs a few more details and the flow needs help but other than that its pretty good
Dani
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