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Cascade (Etheree)

White
water
cascading
with muffled roar
on rocks far below
An everlasting flow
Nature's beauty on display
creating mist where rainbows play
There's no better way to spend my day
than communing with this sound sight delight.

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Combines Free Verse, End Line and Internal Rhyme.

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  • AbidoodleCullen
    August 31
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    "Nature's beauty on display
    creating mist where rainbows play"
    Loved it
    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    Abi


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 5

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    Thanks for entering!

    I'm going to be honest and say I had to look up Etheree to make sure what I said wouldn't conflict with the form... I've never written one!
    Firstly, I was struck by the fact that you were able to make it rhyme. Wow! This form is difficult enough!! This really impressed me.
    Secondly, there is no punctuation. Which, to be fair, may not be entirely necessary here... but it's still something I picked up on, and my personal preference would be for punctuation. If this conflicts with the form, please, disregard the point.
    Other than this, you have some lovely imagery in this piece, and you have done very well with a difficult poetic form.

    Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck!

    Maria


  • Jepardy
    April 25
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    Beautiful piece with great imagery. Nice work. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 5

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    Wow this was a gorgeously
    crafted etheree.

    Such a treasure to read!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • RedAquarius
    January 26

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    Nice, I haven't seen (or done) an etheree in quite a while, refreshing. Also refreshing to NOT see a love poem. Thanks for taking me back to nature.


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 8
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    Very nice imagery
    --Janette


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    What a sweet and gentle read! Filled with nature's beautiful graces. I enjoyed this immensely! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great work!


  • SchizoChic
    September 30, 2008

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    Beautifully written... Great imagery... Best of luck in life and in this contest.........................


  • Shenton silver member
    September 22, 2008

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    Congratulations!

    Not only was your syllable count perfect but you also managed to get your etheree to rhyme.

    Best wishes from 'down-under'.

    Shenton


  • Sahlili20
    May 5, 2008
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    Simply beautiful! Thank you for entering my contest!

  • phoenixonfire
    March 18, 2008

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    Delightful write! It is very innocent and speaks with much serenity to me..a beautiful write with smooth words! Nice form of writing...

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    pri


  • loveisthemoment
    March 16, 2008
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    oh, very lovely! thanks so much for entering and good luck!


  • Arizona Sunset
    February 8, 2008

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    WOW this is beautiful! I love the flow and the form of your poem. I have yet to try this form, you made it look easy. thank you for your entry into my contest. Please do not rate my comment so that you may remain anonymous. ~ Trisha


  • azure85 gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    What a beautiful etheree, with all the beauty of the waterfall with it's sights and sounds. Good luck in the contest!

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